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Bonnie. C.
2/6/2020 09:43:32 pm
Did he ever get that second burrito? Hazel sounds more sophisticated than Mark. . Things are moving slowly, and it would be nice to have more details about their afternoon. Also did the others succeed on the skyboard?
Julie Spencer
2/7/2020 03:43:27 pm
Good catch on the burrito! Although this was the end of the chapter, it's not the end of the afternoon so maybe I need to reword that and/or combine a few chapters. Tonight's chapter starts off with them meeting back up with the guys so I'll see if I can rearrange this whole section during edits. Thanks for the feedback! -Julie Leave a Reply. |
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